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ChiChi234
 
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9/2/2006 | |
I wrote a story about an alien creature I made up. This is only the first chapter. More to come!
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Let me tell you the story of the first planet found to have life other than Earth.
There are sixteen large seas, too small to be oceans, on its surface. There is relatively little animal life on land, just tall trees and jungle-ish flora, but the seas support a plethora of animals.
There is one creature in particular, the Morgril, that appears to show the most intelligence. It is small compared to other creatures on this world, only three and a half feet long, but it is the dominant predator in these seas. It can take down an animal bigger than a rhinoceros. This is mostly so because it hunts in groups. This is a very sophisticated behavior that completely took Earth scientists off guard. Not only did they find multicellular life, but they found SMART life.
Morgril are very social, living in groups of at least ten individuals, not counting the young, of which there may be eight or more. The largest group ever seen contained thirty-four adults and eighteen babies. The males do almost all the hunting, while the females stay behind to care for the young.
Now, we follow the story of a subadult male on his first hunting trip. Let's call him Jimmy.
The sun has gone down. Two of the three moons are shining through the water, bathing everything in an eerie glow. The time has come for the males of the pack to hunt.
Jimmy, along with several other young males, is very excited, as this is the first time he has actually participated in a hunt. Many times he has tagged along to watch the adult males, but this is a different matter altogether. One slip and it's curtains for little Jimmy.
Tonight, the prey is a small herd of nocturnal Naji. They are relatively easy to hunt compared to some of the other prey that the Morgril take down, but this is still a formidable foe. A huge, manatee-like tail capable of paralyzing a Morgril with two blows and gigantic walruslike tusks are the main defenses of the Naji. They are five times the size of an adult male Morgril.
Returning to the hunting party, we see Jimmy and other subadult males swimming in the rear of the group. When they are just out of sight of the Naji, which is really quite close due to their poor vision, they move into position. Jimmy and his friends are out in the open, while the adults are hiding in some coral. They are using the "Cattle-Drive technique" this time.
The Cattle-Drive technique is where a small group of individuals is out in the open, just out of sight range of the Naji, and the rest of the group is on the opposite side of the herd, hiding in the reef.
Jimmy watches the lead male, waiting for his signal. The male bobs his head twice, and Jimmy and his buddies swim as fast as they can toward the herd of Naji, wailing loudly. This startles the herd, and they swim away from the noise, straight into the hiding Morgril in the reef.
The hiding males speed out of their hiding places and stab the Naji with their claws, killing all of them. There may have only been three adults and one subadult, but this kill would last for weeks.
Morgril have very fast metabolisms, and they burn off fat very quickly. As a result, they need to eat a LOT of food. Fortunately, their diet doesn't consist of meat and only meat. They also enjoy plants. This provides them with a nearly infinite food source.
Jimmy and the rest of the hunting party haul their prey back to the rest of the pack. Ths is quite a feat, as Naji weigh more than five times as much as an adult Morgril. When they reach the home reef, the females and babies rush over to the males to greet them.
Mealtime in a Morgril pack is organized. The babies eat first, then the females, then the males that took part in the hunt. Most of the time, the only thing left of the carcass when all have eaten their fill is a few bones.
The sun is rising, and the males have had a rough night. They need rest. Jimmy and the rest of the pack curl up in the reef and sleep.
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A male looks like this.
Morgril
Females are darker with no horns.
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Wup
    
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9/3/2006 | |

You're, like, amazing.
ps. I haven't played Monster Raannnrrrnnchhdoggy |

xan
    
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9/3/2006 | |
Interesting documentary of an alien species, but I do have a few questions:
Where do the names Naji and Morgril come from?
You say that the heavy tail of the Naji can paralyze a Morgril in only a couple of blows -- Does the tail convey some sort of venom, or does the naji aim for the spine of the attacker? If not, a better word may be 'cripple'. Is the tail of a naji longer (than the manatee's), too, so it can swing it around in the water effectively? Maybe look at some dinosaurs with defense mechanisms like this?
Why do the males eat last? I would expect them to be the most famished -- do they get first picks at the hunt site? Or is this some kind of odd social dynamic that is, in the time period of the writing, not yet understood?
And finally, now that I've looked at the picture -- why two pairs of eyes?
There are a couple of other word choices that could be better, but overall, I like it. Keep writing! |

ChiChi234
 
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9/3/2006 | |
Well, usually the males eat the most. Females and babies don't need to eat very much of the kill, as they don't expend much energy staying at home. The Naji tails are very powerful, and they aim for the spine usually.
The names are actually words that the Morgril come up with once they reach sentience and develop a language.
And I have no idea why I added the extra pair of eyes. I just thought it would look cool. I drew this picture before I even thought of writing a story.
((HUGE time jump here. Don't worry, you aren't missing anything big.))
Twelve years after Jimmy's first hunt. Two major events have happened.
One, the pack leader has passed away from a blow to the head by a Naji tail.
Two, Jimmy is now fully grown and in his prime. His forelimbs have become muscular, his tail powerful, and his beak sharp and vicious. He is now the most accomplished hunter in the pack, and many males envy him, while babies aspire to be like him.
But he has one tiny little problem.
He is a bachelor.
In order to ascend to the rank of pack leader, he must have a mate by the end of spring, or he will be cast out of the pack and another male will become leader.
But seduction is no easy feat.
Unlike many Earth animals, courtship does not involve doing a little dance and automatically getting the girl. With Morgril, the process takes weeks, even months, to win over a female. It starts with gifts. A male will give his chosen female things like pretty rocks, food, and a plant called prism-weed, which is transparent until light hits it and it shines many colors. After a week or two of gift giving, he will begin to serenade the female with dolphin like sounds. After a while, he will build a shelter out of any available material, including rocks, coral, plants, or even bones. This is used as a nest for eggs and young.
After a successful mating, in which the female is impregnated, the male becomes extremely protective of her. He will even hiss at babies that get too close. In three months, the female lays up to three eggs, which hatch in about two more months.
Jimmy has had his eye on a lovely young female, henceforth referred to as Suzy. He began to give her things like prism-weed, quartz stones, small fish, a nice big Naji egg (a rare delicacy), and even half his portion of meals. After a week, he would sing to her every time he brought her a gift. Another week later, he built a shelter out of volcanic rock and coral, decorating with prism weed. Suzy loved it. She squealed her joy at how beautiful the shelter was.
That was the night that Jimmy the Bachelor was no more.
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Two months later....
Jimmy looked proudly on his mate's two eggs. He was excited and nervous all at once. Many 'what ifs' ran wild through his head.
"What if they don't like me? What if I'm a bad dad? What if they're deformed? What if they don't hatch?"
Poor jimmy was a nervous wreck.
(Before you say he's too smart to be non-sentient, he doesn't think in words. He thinks by picturing the situation.)
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awmanman
   
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9/3/2006 | |
...Most earth animals that just do a little dance and then get the girl?
...Trust me its a little harder than that.
Nine times have I been told im crazy and ten times I have accepted it. |

ChiChi234
 
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9/3/2006 | |
A lot of animals do. Many birds, lizards, and other non-social animals just dance a bit, and that's pretty much all there is to courtship. Then most of them leave. And I didn't say 'most'. That means more do than don't. I said 'many'. That means that there are a lot that do, but it may or may not be the majority.
And I did not include humans in that phrase, if that's what you're getting at.
Oh, and I've never posted a story on the internet before, so please go easy.
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awmanman
   
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9/4/2006 | |
I know. I was refering to humans.
What i would pay to be a non-social animal...
Nine times have I been told im crazy and ten times I have accepted it. |

Wup
    
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9/4/2006 | |
Yeah, the life of a hampster is where it's at. 
ps. I haven't played Monster Raannnrrrnnchhdoggy |

sam999
  

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5/23/2011 | |
Love it!
One gripe, the link won't open to the picture. |

Solariana
 
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8/20/2011 | |
That's great. I especilly love the drawing of the Mogril, it looks to me like a... praying mantis-shark-velociraptor hybrid, almost. You have my seal of approval! ;D Has the next chapter come out yet?
Drawing today! |
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