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Melody

Melody
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  2/28/2009

Hello, and this story is about a C2 norn raised by Doozers.

Chapter:A lil' Norn Egg

One day in the C2 Albia their was a norn who laid an egg in Doozer territory, after the egg was laid she went to get some cheese for her soon to be born baby.

The Doozers quickly inspected the egg, they tried hitting it, licking it, and biting it, it didn't move so they carried it off. When the norn got back she screamed, dropped all the cheese to the floor and fainted.

The Doozers carried the egg of to the queen Doozer, their the queen Doozer sat on it trying to keep it warm. She heard a crack she screamed but still sat on it, then she heard a large crack and the top flew off of the egg and the queen was sent flying, out popped a baby girl norn.

Chapter 2:Little Accidents

The queen screamed. The norn went over to her and ate her. You're probably thinking the Doozers started to attack the baby girl norn but they took it like it was nothing for they had thought that the queen Doozer was alive and was just hiding behind the norn.

The norn went over to the other Doozers and said "Bibble" which meant bored, and started throwing the Doozer around it screamed. The other Doozers shrugged and went over to the norn and said "norn" and the norn said norn too, the Doozers gasped for they did not know that norns spoke their language. The norn pushed all the Doozers and they all said "Norn Home" which meant the norn could live their. The norn repeated norn home. Then the Doozers said "Doozer" the norn picked all of them up and started shaking them so hard their brains jiggled and their memory of them bringing the egg was erased and replaced with a memory of the queen laying the egg. They then immeadly thought that they had to teach it words and raise to be a proper young Doozer.

Chapter 3:Exploring Some More

The Doozers began to teach the Norn some words they taught her all the words she would need to new, then they taught her to eat. 2 Doozers picked up an apple and showed it to her then they took a bite out of it. The Norn ate the rest of it in one gulp. Then the Doozers took the Non exploring, first they went to the small ocean. The Norn picked up a Doozer and threw it in the water, it screamed. The norn giggled. They explored the volcano and grendal swamp too. At the volcano their was a child grendal the norn went over to it and she grew into a child and started slapping it, the grendal died. The norn giggled again. The Doozers starting teaching her their religon, the Doozer religon was always pray that you will not be eaten and never eat carrots. They worshipped the carrot god. The norn bowed never to eat carrots for that would offend the carrot god. The norn quickley grew into a youth

Chapter 4:The perfect mate and Death

The Doozers told the Norn that she would have to find a Doozer mate so she went of to look for a male Doozer, she saw him by the dessert she picked him up and kiss popped the life out of him litereally! She started to cry even know she didn't even know the guy, she went over to the Doozer hatchery laid 5,000 Doozer eggs and died of pain and sadness.

She has been remembered for her Doozer like actions and the way she tortures the Doozers.


Please comment the story.




 
Officer-1BDI

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  3/1/2009

I can definitely see an improvement in your writing. :) There're some grammatical/spelling errors, but overall I thought it was entertaining. There can never be enough Doozer-inspired stories in the world. ;P

This was my favorite line:

The Doozers starting teaching her their religon, the Doozer religon was always pray that you will not be eaten


You have to be honest with yourself when you are writing. If that leads to somewhere unexpected then perhaps you really needed to go there.
-- Jim Adkins

 
Melody

Melody



  3/1/2009

I'm glad you like it.
I thought I didn't add enough detail to it.



 


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