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Welcome to the Story Competition section of the Writings Forum. Here, you can post up tales that are based off of books, songs, or fairy tales, but are twisted and tweaked to be related to Creatures, for a contest to see who writes the best tale. But there are a few rules to follow:

1. Remember the basic rules: no shouting (typing in all caps), no scrolling (writing lines and lines of meaningless text), etc.

2. The reading material must be appropriate for children under the age of thirteen. That means no cursing, swearing (the swearing symbols are OK, but actually writing the swear words is prohibited), or anything too sordid or violent.

3. The reading material should be based off a book, song, or fairy tale, but you can?t copy the exact material. That is considered copy write infringement.

4. Please try to keep the story in one piece. I don?t really mind someone posting a fractured tale here with two or three parts, but if it has twelve or so parts, than please shorten the story.

Here?s the story that won the contest with my friends for a fractured Norn version of a fairy tale:

Rapunzel

Once upon a time, in the beautiful metaroom of the Norn Terrarium, lived a gorgeous Hardman Norn named Rapunzel. She was a very pretty Norn, but the Hand worried for her; not only did she have one of the shortest tempers in the Shee Starship, but Rapunzel had a tail that was twenty-five feet long!

One night, Rapunzel was taken by the wicked witch, who owned a tower in the Jungle Terrarium and was a horrible Grendel. Rapunzel was locked away in the tower, where she lived for five Norn years. Every five or six hours (in Norn time) the Grendel would command in her gravelly voice, ?Rapunzel, Rapunzel, let down your long tail!? The wicked witch would then climb Rapunzel?s tail and give her some gruel to eat.

On every one of the days Rapunzel was gone, the Hand looked for a male Norn daring and brave enough to rescue the temperamentally-challenged Hardman Norn female. On the final day in the fifth Norn year, the Hand was about to give up, when a male Hardman Norn walked up to him. In his hands was a miniature version of the sludge gun and he wore a glistening armor coated with Grendelsac*. The Hand saw his chance. In Nornish, the Hand commanded the male Hardman Norn to rescue Rapunzel. The Hand also mentioned Rapunzel becoming the male Hardman Norn?s mate. The Norn accepted the challenge and raced up the hill to where a teleporter was. He bravely set the destination to where he knew Rapunzel resided and was sent off.

He rematerialized near the teleporter in the Jungle Terrarium. The Hardman Norn muttered a little, not knowing which way to go, but brightened when he saw the very tower where Rapunzel lay trapped. He grabbed his mini sludge gun and cautiously approached the tower.

The Hardman Norn found a window, the only opening of light in the whole tower. The window was near the very top! ?Rapunzel, Rapunzel, let down your long tail!? He shouted.

One of the prettiest females he had ever seen came to the window. She had leafy-green eyes and freshly-brushed yellow fur. ?Who goes there?? She called back.

??Tis I, Sir Gareth, here to rescue you, my fair maiden!? He yelled.

?Oh, super!? shouted Rapunzel. She blared, ?The Hand sent a yellow-bellied fool to rescue me from this dreadful place! Terrific!?

Sir Gareth noticeably bristled. He then had an idea. Thinking on how to impress her, he retorted, ?Oh, bah! The Hand sent me to rescue a self-centered, vain girl! That?s just great!?

?Oh, yeah! Well you?re just a @#$& Norn!?

Even though Sir Gareth didn?t have time to find out what those words meant in the Dirty Words and Slogans Book, he had another idea. He asked, ?Do you have trouble with your temper??

Rapunzel snapped, ?Why do ya ask?!? I?m a perfect angel! I?m--? she stopped, looked at Sir Gareth, and replied more softly, ?Why, yes. I do have a somewhat short fuse.?

Sir Gareth bowed and offered, ?If you let me rescue you and if you become my mate, I shall teach you how to control your temper better.?

Rapunzel had an odd sensation overcome her. She let down her tail for Sir Gareth to climb. He gratefully climbed upwards to his future-mate. They grabbed onto a nearby branch that was about twenty feet off the ground. Rapunzel wrapped the five feet at the tip of her tail to the branch, grabbed Sir Gareth, and jumped.

It was like bungee jumping. It felt as though both of the Norns were free-falling onto the ground. They landed with a sharp halt right near the ground. Rapunzel unwrapped her tail from the branch.

The new couple were about to head back to the teleporter when the witch showed up. The angry female Grendel shouted, ?That?s my Norn, pretty boy!? She lunged at Sir Gareth, but he still had his weapon. He took out the sludge gun and in three short blasts, the wicked witch was dead.

The couple ran to the teleporter and returned back on the hill in the Norn Terrarium. The Hand was so pleased that he threw a party to celebrate the return of Rapunzel. In only a few days, she acquired a temper as long as her tail. Ever since then, she lived on top of the hill with Sir Gareth, and they all lived happily ever after.

*Grendelsac is sort of a Grendel Reppellent.

The End

...Now it's time for the first in the Story Competition! The best submitted fractured Norn version of an adventure story will win the first story competition! If you have one, feel free to post it below. After a good bunch is down there, I'll announce the best writer for tweaking an adventure story! Pax amor et lepos in iocando! Good luck to you all!

Hawksight